Let me tell you about my first college paper.
I remember the panic. Staring hollow-eyed at a blank Word document, I felt the hours melt into each other and I tipped into despair. I may have been able to trick my high school teachers into thinking I had a modicum of intelligence, but could I convince a professor? He has a PhD, I reminded myself. He was reading “Finnegan’s Wake” when I was laboring through the Hardy Boys.
In a flash of inspiration—or desperation—I turned to my texts for the class. These texts, by the way, were thrillingly raunchy. Like many of today’s higher-ed humanities offerings, my course was equal parts academia and soft-core porn. Presumably the graphic musings on human sexuality make the book-learning go down easier (or maybe they just make going down easier, am I right?). Blowing through three chapters on the politics of oral sex, I waded through the filth for ideas I could seize. I found nothing. My mind, I knew, was ruined by trash TV and trashier Google searches.
All I saw on the pages were words (well, duh, they’re books. But bear with me). Big, smart-sounding words. I still didn’t understand the underlying ideas, but the words I could use.
So I made word salad. Paradigm prolixity therefore repudiation utilization modality homogeneity prevarication…
And my professor loved it.
Flick through the nearest academic journal and you’ll see why. For years, passive voice, jargon, and needless complexity have sucked clarity and relevance from scholarly writing. Many publications are now more or less impenetrable.
Take, say, this infamous jawbreaker by Judith Butler:
“The move from a structuralist account in which capital is understood to structure social relations in relatively homologous ways to a view of hegemony in which power relations are subject to repetition, convergence, and rearticulation brought the question of temporality into the thinking of structure, and marked a shift from a form of Althusserian theory that takes structural totalities as theoretical objects to one in which the insights into the contingent possibility of structure inaugurate a renewed conception of hegemony as bound up with the contingent sites and strategies of the rearticulation of power.”
(From “Further Reflections on the Conversations of Our Time,” a 1997 article in the scholarly journal Diacritics).
Wait. In a structuralist model, something—here, capital—structures something else? And we reinforce power relations by repetition? Time has something to do with all of this? Keep talking, Butler. I’ll be reading my X-rated history books. (But those are pretentiously written, too—so really, I’ll be on Facebook.)
It’s unclear, by the way, whether Butler sees any irony in criticizing rearticulation when she’s committing that very fault in her prose. She repeats (in various forms) the words: structure, contingent, relations, and theory. Even the word “rearticulation” is rearticulated. All in the same 94-word sentence. While some repetition is tolerable, toss in the phrase “Althusserian theory” and you’ve lost even the most dogged reader.
Friends, this kind of writing is a crime. Somewhere in the history of letters, we moved from “brevity is the soul of wit” to a misguided belief that for a text to be important or intelligent, it must be hard to read.
Consequently, everyday writing has split into two poles. On one side academics, legislators, and bureaucrats spew turgid unreadable prose. On the other, people like you and me write Tweets that l00k lik3 dis. The problem is, the former group is supposed to be writing for the latter group. And the things they write can greatly impact our lives. But have you ever tried to read a bill? Or a tax form? Or a scientific study?
Being able to write things no one understands does not mean you’re smart. If you’re an academic, it could mean you care more about sounding intelligent than getting your ideas across. Never mind that scholarly work should enable progress and help us better understand the world we live in.
If you’re in politics, it could mean you’re full of noncommittal BS, or maybe you have something to hide. Never mind that our political process should be open, transparent, and subject to public oversight.
If you’re a scientist or engineer, it could mean you’re a scientist or engineer. You’re trying your best.
To write clearly is to think clearly. That’s why it’s hard. The ability to write plainly and well should be a quality we demand in those who draft our laws and design our curricula. But incentives push writers in the opposite direction—because writing clearly is scary. If your ideas are clear, it’s easier to find fault with your work. You don’t have a shield of jargon to hide behind. On the other hand, if no one knows what you’re talking about, you’re harder to criticize. People look at your big words and assume you’re right; or, if you’re not, it’s not worth the trouble of slogging through your paper to correct you.
Now, I’m not saying dumb everything down. Flashy words exist for a reason, and using them well can lend power and control to your writing. I’m saying needless verbiage must go.
Even so, sometimes it’s okay to be jargon-y. Write for your audience. If you’re a specialist writing in a scientific journal on, say, the effects of some obscure treatment on some obscure cancer, you’re probably writing for fellow scientists and specialists. If your science is good, your prose need not be crystal-clear. What a lay reader may find perplexing a scientist may find plain. But if there’s a breakthrough, the guy whose father has that type of rare cancer deserves to understand what’s going on, and he’s not going to want to read your article.
Nor should he have to. Information must not be confined to an elite thesaurus-wielding group. Thank god for the journalists who explain bloated pieces of legislation or academic studies to the public. Still, they shouldn’t have to do that legwork. In legal documents especially, bad prose is a public hazard. Those long-winded sentences are the thugs of writing, standing arms-crossed at the doorway of a document, intimidating those who seek to enter. While academia does not have the same obligation to the public as, well, our government, learning should be more accessible. Overly difficult scholarly writing restricts ideas to an erudite circle, which means those ideas have little impact and limited reach. Sure, not all work needs to be for a general audience. But if intellectuals wish to bring about change on a scale broader than the conference room of their college’s Philosophy department, they need to write in a style more people can understand and appreciate. That way, those educators will be doing their jobs—educating!
So, back to that paper. I got an A-minus. I probably deserved a C. But under puffed-up prose I was able to disguise my lack of original thought—sort of like how numerous academics and bureaucrats get by. But what did my paper accomplish in the long run? Nothing. But imagine if I had stumbled on a revolutionary idea in the course of writing my essay. And if I had communicated that idea loudly and lucidly? Great ideas can change the world. So, friends, I challenge you to do the hard thing. Write with meaning. Write with vigor. Write with force. But above all—write simply.
Charlie Tyson is a second year at the University of Virginia and a regular TableTalk contributor.